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English sentence unclear
Enhancing unclear sentenceAsking 'the pleasure of your company' in an invitationIs this funny or correct or…;'not only reflected …, but also the fact that …'Is 'Thanks to' a Gallicism to be avoided?How to get a native-like English style of speaking ?Is using “general plan of structure” appropriate in biology?Acknowledging someone had an impact on your choice of careerIs using unnecessarily long words bad practice?Is the language of The Economist artificially complex?
Disconcerting as the grin he then waited my pleasure with was the cast of his features, not just like any I had seen.
I do not perfectly understand "with was" -- with what? This is rather confusing for me.
I am not a native speaker.
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Disconcerting as the grin he then waited my pleasure with was the cast of his features, not just like any I had seen.
I do not perfectly understand "with was" -- with what? This is rather confusing for me.
I am not a native speaker.
style
migrated from writing.stackexchange.com 1 hour ago
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Is this from something or did you write it yourself? This sentence is incorrect grammatically. There are many issues as a result. Also, wrong Stack.
– Sora Tamashii
5 hours ago
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Questions about a sentence you read somewhere and do not understand belong on English Language Learners. It would be helpful to those who would answer you if you could provide the source of the sentence: where did you find it?
– Galastel
5 hours ago
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I found the source, and it seems to be neo-archaic speech. Poorly written garbage. From 1966: Giles Goat-boy, Or, The Revised New Syllabus
– Sora Tamashii
5 hours ago
The sentence is not grammatically incorrect, although it does use an unusual form.
– David Siegel
12 mins ago
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Disconcerting as the grin he then waited my pleasure with was the cast of his features, not just like any I had seen.
I do not perfectly understand "with was" -- with what? This is rather confusing for me.
I am not a native speaker.
style
Disconcerting as the grin he then waited my pleasure with was the cast of his features, not just like any I had seen.
I do not perfectly understand "with was" -- with what? This is rather confusing for me.
I am not a native speaker.
style
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Is this from something or did you write it yourself? This sentence is incorrect grammatically. There are many issues as a result. Also, wrong Stack.
– Sora Tamashii
5 hours ago
1
Questions about a sentence you read somewhere and do not understand belong on English Language Learners. It would be helpful to those who would answer you if you could provide the source of the sentence: where did you find it?
– Galastel
5 hours ago
1
I found the source, and it seems to be neo-archaic speech. Poorly written garbage. From 1966: Giles Goat-boy, Or, The Revised New Syllabus
– Sora Tamashii
5 hours ago
The sentence is not grammatically incorrect, although it does use an unusual form.
– David Siegel
12 mins ago
add a comment |
Is this from something or did you write it yourself? This sentence is incorrect grammatically. There are many issues as a result. Also, wrong Stack.
– Sora Tamashii
5 hours ago
1
Questions about a sentence you read somewhere and do not understand belong on English Language Learners. It would be helpful to those who would answer you if you could provide the source of the sentence: where did you find it?
– Galastel
5 hours ago
1
I found the source, and it seems to be neo-archaic speech. Poorly written garbage. From 1966: Giles Goat-boy, Or, The Revised New Syllabus
– Sora Tamashii
5 hours ago
The sentence is not grammatically incorrect, although it does use an unusual form.
– David Siegel
12 mins ago
Is this from something or did you write it yourself? This sentence is incorrect grammatically. There are many issues as a result. Also, wrong Stack.
– Sora Tamashii
5 hours ago
Is this from something or did you write it yourself? This sentence is incorrect grammatically. There are many issues as a result. Also, wrong Stack.
– Sora Tamashii
5 hours ago
1
1
Questions about a sentence you read somewhere and do not understand belong on English Language Learners. It would be helpful to those who would answer you if you could provide the source of the sentence: where did you find it?
– Galastel
5 hours ago
Questions about a sentence you read somewhere and do not understand belong on English Language Learners. It would be helpful to those who would answer you if you could provide the source of the sentence: where did you find it?
– Galastel
5 hours ago
1
1
I found the source, and it seems to be neo-archaic speech. Poorly written garbage. From 1966: Giles Goat-boy, Or, The Revised New Syllabus
– Sora Tamashii
5 hours ago
I found the source, and it seems to be neo-archaic speech. Poorly written garbage. From 1966: Giles Goat-boy, Or, The Revised New Syllabus
– Sora Tamashii
5 hours ago
The sentence is not grammatically incorrect, although it does use an unusual form.
– David Siegel
12 mins ago
The sentence is not grammatically incorrect, although it does use an unusual form.
– David Siegel
12 mins ago
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The sentence would probably be better as follows:
He grinned disconcertingly then waited. My interest was held by the form of his features which just were not like any I had seen.
Okay, thank you. Your simplified version made me realize that "Disconcerting as the grin he then waited my pleasure with" is all together and I could find 'wait upon his pleasure' by Shakespeare. This is John Barth, his style is nearly perfect. I could not exactly break down the sentence, I should have associated 'wait with' right away. Sorry.
– As Vet
5 hours ago
No. You're fine. Just wanting to help as best I can. :)
– Sora Tamashii
5 hours ago
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An alternate version of this sentence would be
The look of his features -- not just like any I had seen -- was as disconcerting to me as the grin he showed as he waited for my response.
The speaker makes clear that he is upset, mildly upset, by both the unusual facial features of his visitor and by the grin that the visitor showed. He equates these two sources of upset. The phrase "waited my pleasure with" is somewhat archaic, but in no way wrong. I would not imitate it in most writing, however.
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The sentence would probably be better as follows:
He grinned disconcertingly then waited. My interest was held by the form of his features which just were not like any I had seen.
Okay, thank you. Your simplified version made me realize that "Disconcerting as the grin he then waited my pleasure with" is all together and I could find 'wait upon his pleasure' by Shakespeare. This is John Barth, his style is nearly perfect. I could not exactly break down the sentence, I should have associated 'wait with' right away. Sorry.
– As Vet
5 hours ago
No. You're fine. Just wanting to help as best I can. :)
– Sora Tamashii
5 hours ago
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The sentence would probably be better as follows:
He grinned disconcertingly then waited. My interest was held by the form of his features which just were not like any I had seen.
Okay, thank you. Your simplified version made me realize that "Disconcerting as the grin he then waited my pleasure with" is all together and I could find 'wait upon his pleasure' by Shakespeare. This is John Barth, his style is nearly perfect. I could not exactly break down the sentence, I should have associated 'wait with' right away. Sorry.
– As Vet
5 hours ago
No. You're fine. Just wanting to help as best I can. :)
– Sora Tamashii
5 hours ago
add a comment |
The sentence would probably be better as follows:
He grinned disconcertingly then waited. My interest was held by the form of his features which just were not like any I had seen.
The sentence would probably be better as follows:
He grinned disconcertingly then waited. My interest was held by the form of his features which just were not like any I had seen.
answered 5 hours ago
Sora Tamashii
Okay, thank you. Your simplified version made me realize that "Disconcerting as the grin he then waited my pleasure with" is all together and I could find 'wait upon his pleasure' by Shakespeare. This is John Barth, his style is nearly perfect. I could not exactly break down the sentence, I should have associated 'wait with' right away. Sorry.
– As Vet
5 hours ago
No. You're fine. Just wanting to help as best I can. :)
– Sora Tamashii
5 hours ago
add a comment |
Okay, thank you. Your simplified version made me realize that "Disconcerting as the grin he then waited my pleasure with" is all together and I could find 'wait upon his pleasure' by Shakespeare. This is John Barth, his style is nearly perfect. I could not exactly break down the sentence, I should have associated 'wait with' right away. Sorry.
– As Vet
5 hours ago
No. You're fine. Just wanting to help as best I can. :)
– Sora Tamashii
5 hours ago
Okay, thank you. Your simplified version made me realize that "Disconcerting as the grin he then waited my pleasure with" is all together and I could find 'wait upon his pleasure' by Shakespeare. This is John Barth, his style is nearly perfect. I could not exactly break down the sentence, I should have associated 'wait with' right away. Sorry.
– As Vet
5 hours ago
Okay, thank you. Your simplified version made me realize that "Disconcerting as the grin he then waited my pleasure with" is all together and I could find 'wait upon his pleasure' by Shakespeare. This is John Barth, his style is nearly perfect. I could not exactly break down the sentence, I should have associated 'wait with' right away. Sorry.
– As Vet
5 hours ago
No. You're fine. Just wanting to help as best I can. :)
– Sora Tamashii
5 hours ago
No. You're fine. Just wanting to help as best I can. :)
– Sora Tamashii
5 hours ago
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An alternate version of this sentence would be
The look of his features -- not just like any I had seen -- was as disconcerting to me as the grin he showed as he waited for my response.
The speaker makes clear that he is upset, mildly upset, by both the unusual facial features of his visitor and by the grin that the visitor showed. He equates these two sources of upset. The phrase "waited my pleasure with" is somewhat archaic, but in no way wrong. I would not imitate it in most writing, however.
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An alternate version of this sentence would be
The look of his features -- not just like any I had seen -- was as disconcerting to me as the grin he showed as he waited for my response.
The speaker makes clear that he is upset, mildly upset, by both the unusual facial features of his visitor and by the grin that the visitor showed. He equates these two sources of upset. The phrase "waited my pleasure with" is somewhat archaic, but in no way wrong. I would not imitate it in most writing, however.
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An alternate version of this sentence would be
The look of his features -- not just like any I had seen -- was as disconcerting to me as the grin he showed as he waited for my response.
The speaker makes clear that he is upset, mildly upset, by both the unusual facial features of his visitor and by the grin that the visitor showed. He equates these two sources of upset. The phrase "waited my pleasure with" is somewhat archaic, but in no way wrong. I would not imitate it in most writing, however.
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An alternate version of this sentence would be
The look of his features -- not just like any I had seen -- was as disconcerting to me as the grin he showed as he waited for my response.
The speaker makes clear that he is upset, mildly upset, by both the unusual facial features of his visitor and by the grin that the visitor showed. He equates these two sources of upset. The phrase "waited my pleasure with" is somewhat archaic, but in no way wrong. I would not imitate it in most writing, however.
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Is this from something or did you write it yourself? This sentence is incorrect grammatically. There are many issues as a result. Also, wrong Stack.
– Sora Tamashii
5 hours ago
1
Questions about a sentence you read somewhere and do not understand belong on English Language Learners. It would be helpful to those who would answer you if you could provide the source of the sentence: where did you find it?
– Galastel
5 hours ago
1
I found the source, and it seems to be neo-archaic speech. Poorly written garbage. From 1966: Giles Goat-boy, Or, The Revised New Syllabus
– Sora Tamashii
5 hours ago
The sentence is not grammatically incorrect, although it does use an unusual form.
– David Siegel
12 mins ago